Monday 30 May 2016

it must be magic

It must be magic
I was walking in the creaky forest just me. I saw a funny looking figure. I moved closer so I bent down and carefully picked it up. It looked like it was morphing or something. I went to touch it, it felt silky like boxer shorts then I carried it over to a tree. I sat down, it felt bumpy and tough so I got my jacket and we sat on it. I looked at the figure again, it looked bigger. I started to close my eyes, I tried to open them it was like they were padlocked. I opened my eyes like it was christmas day I sat up and felt the hard yellow sleep in my eyes. I rubbed them and went to open my hands and saw nothing. I was shocked like I just did the ice bucket challenge. so I lay back down and closed my eyes hoping it was a dream. I sat up and looked in my hand again still nothing. I stood up and after about an hour I could not find the figure. I saw a bright. light I started following it and I saw that same figure in a cage, traveling to this big castle. I saw they walked through these humongous gates maybe bigger than a giant even. I creeped up behind the carriage and quietly crawled under a old rugged blanket. I was looking quietly for the figure and I just found the cage. I saw the cage but it was open. I went back under the blanket and thought to myself, morphing, bigger, figure. It all made sense. I found out that the carriage was an old weapon carriage so I looked for a bag. I saw in the corner of my eye an old bag so I carefully opened it. In the bag I saw a bow and a gold sword. I grabbed them both and sneakily climbed out and saw that there were some dead guards. I thought to myself that this was enough I grabbed their armor and walked through the gate and started walking towards the castle, still seeing dead guards. When I got to the doors of the gate I knocked. It made an echo so loud it felt like it lasted forever. But no one answered. I knocked again, no answer again. So i turned the door handle slowly, it creaked so loud like someone screaming. I swallowed and saw that same light like on the carriage but lighter. I followed the light, it lead to a shiny room. it was yellow not purple like the figure. It was gold and lots of it. I saw the light walking in the gold to this big white gem. I started to follow the figure and I looked for the light, I couldn't see it. Then I saw a man but not a normal man, it was an evil knight. I hid behind the big beams. I was scared, really scared but I wasn't giving up now I ran up to this throne and yelled “Come get me!”. He turned slowly and started walking and the knight said “I am Evil Knight Amifist” and he started running at me with his sword, I dodged it and hit him in the back. It made a crack in his armor but my sword it was stuck there. I saw another sword on the throne so I ran towards it but I saw a foot come out and I tripped over it and fell to the ground. Then the knight put a sword up to my chin and said “Give up or die!” so I crawled back towards the throne and put my hand up on the throne and I felt the cold silver blade touch my hand. I grabbed the sword and slid under his body and stood up I held my hands up and boom I hit the spot. He fell to the ground, the knight yelled “Ahhhhhhhhhhhh, I'll get you one day!” and he disappeared into the dark night and they all lived happily ever after.
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2 comments:

  1. Kia ora Matiu.
    My name is Ethan and I am your buddy.

    I really like how you made all this suspense near the end. Will you make another story because I would really like to know what happens next. Maybe next time choose some more interesting words for example if I had walking I would put creeping if you want it to be more scary.

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  2. Kia Ethan
    I made this quite awhile ago i like it too maybe i could make another one now ill probably be able to write better words too describe it.

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Thank-you for your positive, thoughtful, helpful korero.